After reviewing the first draft of my script, one of the main things that was picked up on was the fact that it didn't feel enough like an intro, but more like an internal scene. Because of the continuous nature of my script, it meant that the feel that an intro is supposed to have could not be obtained without some severe modification. This modification will give me a lot more scope to play with, when thinking about mise en scene, angles, and the micro elements that lead to the macro representations. Another criticism that was found was that I had moved far too quickly into a major dramatic moment of the film. In doing this, I had effectively zoned myself out, meaning that I couldn't create a new, "proper" intro without a total re-design. In re-designing my script, I have also given myself far less rigidity, in terms of how I am going to represent the main character.